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/ 1 point WRITING TASK 2 Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

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It is widely known that
parents
are always buy
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the
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things for their
children
 and they allow their
children
 to do whatever they want. I believe
that is
 not
the
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a
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 good way to raise a child, because
parents
 need to
intoduce
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introduce
 them
with
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to
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 something
is
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that is
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 good, and something not. So, when they are older, they could be a well-mannered person. I think it is better for
parents
 to guide their
children
 to give something that
really
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 good for them.
For example
, when the
children
 were asked
a
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about a
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video game,
parents
 should not buy one, because there might be
better
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 present to give to their
children
, like a book, or
a school equipment
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school equipment
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. So, the
children
 will be informed that the video game is not suitable for them yet, it is better to spend their time
to study
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, or
read
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 a book. With that kind way of parenting, the
children
 will learn that there will always be a reason behind something.
For instance
, the
children
 will realize that spending too much time with video games is not that good for their health, because they will only be sitting, and doing no physical
move
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.
Hence
, they will be well-prepared for things that they are facing in the future
,
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apply
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 and become
a
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apply
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well-mannered
person
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people
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. In conclusion, despite
of
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many
parents
 prefer to buy all the things their
children
 asked, and allow them to do everything, I think it is better for them to tell their
children
 which thing is good, and which thing is not. So, in the
later
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latter
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 days, the
children
 would understand why they are taught that way.
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