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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Write at least 250 words

#minutes #students #work #results #time #education #pressure
Knowledge is an important part of life. Having formal
educations
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 means that
Students
 have
commited
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committed
 to
do
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 certain steps of learning in order to gain
knowledge
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 they seek. Enlisting
in formal
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informal
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 institutions of
education
 means that there is a cost to pay.
However
, Not all
people
 have
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privileged
priviliged
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 life to
fulfill
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 the
tuitition
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tuition
 so they have to work extra time that leisure time become scarce for them. For
students
 that
needs
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 to survive paying bills and daily needs, They have to do extra effort making side jobs, even in the irregular hours. I personally think that the reason for it is the lack of standard
education
 cost and government incentive that
people
, especially the poor, have trouble
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 higher
education
. We need
a
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very thorough
systems
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 that ensure all
of
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citizen
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 can access better
education
. Government can start with posing a bill for schools or
college
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 to implement transparent and standard fees for
education
 in
all
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region
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.Prioritizing the
teachers
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 welfare and
students
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 facilities would contribute
making
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safe
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 and approachable
place
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 for poor
people
. In conclusion, To facilitate
students
 better in proper time studying and avoid constant feeling stressed, Government needs to implement better systems that really concerned about how
education
 can easily
accessed
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 by the
people
.
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