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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.

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Sending their children to boarding school is a controversial subject for many people, some argue that it is a great choice for their children but others may contradict that opinion.
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 and important chance for
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 for being well prepared for their forthcoming lives. Boarding
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 have
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 advantages for a pupil.
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 of all, it enables a child to utilize his free time with his peers and develop crucial communication and social skills which will impact his ultimate career as well as his future life in general.
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 of all,
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 type of school always has a teacher to stay over as well to make sure that
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 are getting along well, and
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 may help a student to get a better discipline which
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 helpful for his future career. Plus they can get assistance from their teacher anytime they want and
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positive
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 effect on their
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works
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.
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, boarding
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 may have several downsides as well as upsides.
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, since there will be a range of
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 from different age groups,
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 of the younger
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 by senior ones might be encountered. Possible physical and/or psychological abuse of a child would of course leave
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lifetime
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 to his life.
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 to that, when a kid lives away from their home and family for a long time, they possibly feel homesick and alone.
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 would eventually and inevitably affect their social aura and mood in a detrimental manner. In conclusion, it is obvious that boarding
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 have many pros as well as cons. In my point of view, it would be better and much more beneficial for a student to choose boarding
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 in terms of developing discipline, social skills and many other important skills which would be
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 in their future careers.

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