Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this? Write at least 250 words.

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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. But why
people
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are walking less on a daily basis? There are some reasons why
people
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are less walking nowadays.
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,
people
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are so busy with their business that they forget to take care of their health.
People
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always
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in a rush every morning to go to work for earning money. They have only
ittle
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little
time for walking around the street or park.
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,
people
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don't feel safe while walking on the roads or
pedestrian
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.
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is because
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are driving rashly on the roads and some youngsters who
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have
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a license
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driving
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the car which could endanger the
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who walk on the road.
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there any way to encourage
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to start walking more? The answer is yes. The most important way is that
people
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have to be made aware of the potential benefits
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regular walking. There should be more
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in
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about the benefit of walking
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as for their brain, memory, blood pressure, and fitness.
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, the strict law must be implemented by the government on drink and drive and the
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must redesign the city with proper pavements and pedestrian. Conclusion
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