Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many countries are focusing on their own increasing
economy
which is very vital.
However
, others believe that
government
should think about other important things equally for the country. In my opinion, I completely agree
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statement and there are some reasons that are elaborated in the
further
paragraphs. To commence with, in my view,
progressive
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economy
is beneficial for the country in
many
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way
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. The main reason for
that is
,
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the nation
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could enhance their capability
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worldwide and become
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superpower
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if the
economy
is strong.
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image
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through out
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the worldwide but
also
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source in many fields like defence, agriculture and oil sector.
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country
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could not be dependent on other
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for exchanging materials.
Hence
,
government
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should work on how to enhance the
economy
to become a better
nation
.
On the other hand
,
government
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should think about other sectors equally.
Government
should improve the internal problems which
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very debatable.
For instance
, improve public transport for
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the better
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journey of the citizens and remove other transport taxes for the better
conveniency
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convenience
.
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,
government
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should think about their citizens and their basic requirements to extend the internal capabilities.
In addition
,
organisation
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the organisation
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should decrease the tuition fee in
educational
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field, so that every
children
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get their basic education.
Therefore
,
government
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should think about their own internal affairs which
is
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very important for the citizens. In conclusion, according to my opinion,
progressive
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economy
is very important for the
nation
to become independent
in
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worldwide
instead
of
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thinking
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about other progress.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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