Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many countries are focusing on their own increasing
economy
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which is very vital.
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, others believe that
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should think about other important things equally for the country. In my opinion, I completely agree
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statement and there are some reasons that are elaborated in the
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paragraphs. To commence with, in my view,
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economy
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is beneficial for the country in
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any
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way
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. The main reason for
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,
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nation
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the nation
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could enhance their capability
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worldwide and become
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a superpower
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superpower
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if the
economy
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is strong.
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, not only create
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through out
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the worldwide but
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become
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an export
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source in many fields like defence, agriculture and oil sector.
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,
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could not be dependent on other
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nation
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for exchanging materials.
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,
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government
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the government
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should work on how to enhance the
economy
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to become a better
nation
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.
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,
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government
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the government
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should think about other sectors equally.
Government
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should improve the internal problems which
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very debatable.
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, improve public transport for
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the better
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journey of the citizens and remove other transport taxes for the better
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convenience
.
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,
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government
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the government
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should think about their citizens and their basic requirements to extend the internal capabilities.
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,
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the organisation
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should decrease the tuition fee in
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the educational
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field, so that every
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get their basic education.
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,
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government
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the government
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should think about their own internal affairs which
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very important for the citizens. In conclusion, according to my opinion,
progressive
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economy
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is very important for the
nation
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to become independent
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worldwide
instead
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of
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thinking
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about other progress.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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