Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

There is no doubt that
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there
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are a lot of
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their
children
with whatever they ask for and let them do whatever they want.
However
, I disagree with
parents
who think that those activities are acceptable to raise
children
, as I believe they will result in their
children
becoming entitled. When the
parents
allow those parenting styles to continue for years, their
children
will develop an expectation that something will always be available in their time of need regardless
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circumstances.They will never settle for anything less than what they expect. The
children
will feel entitled.
That is
exactly why
parents
should teach their
children
from
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early age that not everything will go our way,
that bad things
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may occur, and that we must
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ourselves to accept them. Another thing to note is that those parenting styles will make it more difficult for the
children
to find new friends because they typically never learn to share. They are constantly put themselves
first
, which makes sharing tough. Based on the foregoing
that is
exactly why
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parents
should avoid
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overly
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their
children
because it will have harmful effects in the future.
Parents
should develop clear boundaries for their kids in order for the kids to learn to be satisfied with
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what
they already have and what they have been given.
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hope in their adulthood they
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  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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