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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older? Write 250 words.

#parents #children #consequences #style
Making a choice is not an easy situation
to
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 the majority of children
arround
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around
 the world. Some kids are in the position that their parents are too restrictive, while
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others said that their parents give them
flexibility
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 to decide what to do or to buy things. Talking about
this
 kind of parenting way, personally, I prefer
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 a
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permissive
 parent rather than
otherwise
.
This
 essay elaborates why allowing our
kid
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 to do whatever they want is a good insight. The
first
 reason is based on the findings in business research held by
popular
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 economic
magazine
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. They informed
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their reader, if we give more trust to our children in deciding what they want, they will be more mentally safe because their aspiration is appreciated by their parents.
This
 situation can boost the confidence level, so they
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 afraid to make
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a decision
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decision
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decisions
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. In future,
decisive
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a decisive
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person
 tends to be successful in any major, especially in
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negotiation
negotiations
 due to their ability to make wise policy.
Recent
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 article reveals that 100 wealthiest people in the world are good
decision maker
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, and its turn out that it's related to the way their parent give freedom of choice in the past. Another research held by Melbourne University
also
 supports the idea that raising kids by giving them freedom of choice can make a
person
 become more responsible in the future. It's based on the conclusion that if we give more space to our
kid
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 to decide what they want, they tend to be able to cope with the problems. From the experiment on local students in Jakarta, it seems that pupils who were raised by
this
 parenting lifestyle are not reluctant to criticism. Because they are already experienced failure in the past, they become not afraid to be wrong or fail.
This
 is the main trait of
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the responsible
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person
. Based on these reasons, I fully support the idea that giving our kids the ability to make decisions is a good way of parenting.
Although
 many restrictive moms and dads sometimes feel that
this
 style can lead to bad behaviour in the future, I believe that it is not true.
Moreover
, the study said
otherwise
; unrestrictive style enables our children to be
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responsible and decisive
person
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. That's personality is what we expect as a parent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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