Besides a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write 250 words.

Despite
of
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being useful in many aspects of society, there are people who still believe that the
internet
causes problems.
However
, personally, I strongly disagree with them, because they have not
include
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all the advantages that the
internet
brings and only take the drawbacks into account. A problem that
are
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primarily used by people who oppose that the
internet
's advantages
outweight
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outweigh
its disadvantages
is
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that it is easier now to spread negative
contents
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compared to the pre-
internet
era. Hoax is an example of negative
contents
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, which is now becoming a problem even
government
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have concerned about it. The other example is pornography,
that
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is now getting easier to be accessed without an age limitation
,
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if they know how to do it.
However
, almost all of the drawbacks the
internet
may
brings
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is not from the
internet
itself, but from its user. There are
miriads
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myriads
myriad
of negative content,
however
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there are
also
billion of
positive
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one
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. It is the choice of the users which content they prefer to
access
.
However
,
access
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internet
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the internet
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are
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not limited to
adult only
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, children
also
can
access
it freely nowadays. In
this
case, the role of the adults is an important factor to supervise them in order to only have
access
to the desired contents.
Furthermore
, the advancement of technology is now making it possible for parents to continuously monitor their children's activities
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the
internet
and block
the
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unwanted sites. To conclude, as a type of
tools
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that its
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main purpose is for the wellbeing of humanity, the
internet
can be used for good or for bad purposes. It is our freedom to use it wisely.
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