Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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significant
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the wealth of a nation.There are many
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economic progress as the most important goal while some people assume that other types of development are as important as economic progress .Personally,I agree to see
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as the most necessary
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,there are several disadvantages when a nation
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too much concentration on developing
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too much attention to one
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,the governments might ignore or have minus notice to
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field
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of the
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the nation could have
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unequal spending among
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features.
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,the environment could be harmed due to the activities in manufacturing.To
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the space for the factories,
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,which are used for plenty of industries,people have to cut down many trees and destroy uncountable
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forests.
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,focusing just on
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could be a disaster for the
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,I believe that taking
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as a major
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could benefit the
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and outweigh the disadvantages.
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,with a strong
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,the nations could have more
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to invest in several
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of the
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to build
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wider road or upgrade the traffic lights which ensure the safety of citizens.
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,the disadvantages when having the distraction from
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field
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of nations could be countered with
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enormous source of
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from good economic.People would have more opportunities to approach
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education when the government invest
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in education or get a better quality of life because of the
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from
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government.
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,assuming
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as the most significant goal might be the good
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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