In the future all cars ,buses and trucks will be driveless.The only people travalling inside these vehicles will be passengers . Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicle outweigh the disadvantages?
Many
people
believed
that one day Wrong verb form
believe
the
vehicles have no drivers. From now on, the drivers Correct article usage
apply
were
replaced by the automatic system which Wrong verb form
will be
controls
by advanced automation. From my point of view, there are both benefits and drawbacks from a perspective.
In my opinion, there are many advantages of driverless in the future. Wrong verb form
is controlled
Firstly
, it will decrease the accidents that causing
by human errors. Change the form of the verb
caused
For example
, the
human effectiveness could be wrong as their illness. It Correct article usage
apply
also
impacts to make a decision when they drive by
their Change preposition
on
owns
. Wrong verb form
own
Second,
it is more comfortable for people
who have long hours of driving. Yet, they could have enough sleep and relax. Moreover
, the development of the system will give more acknowledges about
higher innovation. So, the adolescents could learn a specific lesson that improves their skills.
Change preposition
to
By contrast
, some people
still believed
that higher technology lacks Wrong verb form
believe
the empathized
as they make a decision by using an algorithm that cannot aware Wrong verb form
empathy
people
sense. It is clear that
they do not trust in these. In addition
, the disruption of technology affects the
regular occupations which means the drivers will lose Correct article usage
apply
careers
. An instance, in Thailand, most Correct pronoun usage
their careers
labours
in Correct your spelling
labourers
this
field are elder
Replace the word
elderly
that
Correct word choice
and
has
no other proficiency to find a new job. So, they would be unemployed.
In conclusion, I strongly Correct subject-verb agreement
have
believed
that the benefits of the new technology as 'driverless' would be more advantages than disadvantages. Wrong verb form
believe
Nevertheless
, we have to be concerned about the problems of the labour
who were affected by the disruption.Correct your spelling
labourers
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task response
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coherence cohesion
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