A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter regarding the possibility of your company investment in our soccer

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for the youth for two years or promoting two shows outdoors for the community. There are many positive impacts of investing in the local soccer

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as the possibility of winning regional or even national championships, due to the hiring of more qualified professionals and improvements in the facilities.

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, we have been looking for a sponsor for years, as their uniforms are in poor condition and the parents could not afford new ones.

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could allow you to promote your brand for years.

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, there are a few benefits in promoting the concerts, as it

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helps to increase the visibility of your brand.

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, the population would have an additional option of leisure in the city, which would be a good option for the ones who do not have cars.

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, those benefits could be soon forgotten, as it would be only two punctual events. As you required public opinion, as a mother of an athlete and trainer of the

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, I strongly believe sponsoring the

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could bring excellent results and change their future, because they do have much potential.

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, we already have three festivals a year in near cities, and the games

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attract many people to cheer for our

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, which increases our love for the city. I hope you make a better decision for the community. Yours sincerely, Mariana Borges

Submitted by mariih_borges on Wed Mar 16 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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250 words

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