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some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for commiting it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some people have an attitude that each type of atrocity should have its own
punishment
, while others think that each
punishment
 should be based on the
motivation
 and weight of the crime. I actually prefer to think that a
second
 opinion is better.
Firstly
, I will start with the drawbacks of the
first
 opinion. It is well-known that all crimes have different motivations, and sometimes some people are performing crimes when they do not have any other options. An instance of
this
 is when a real crime performer tries to kill or hurt the victim. In
this
 case, the victim does not have any other options to defend itself.
This
 self-defend sometimes hurts too bad
crime
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a crime
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 performer. So
this
 makes the victim a real criminal, but it is obvious that
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the criminal
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criminal
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 does not deserve big
punishment
.
By contrast
, some people who have done really big crimes could lie to the court about their
motivation
.
This
 could cause
punishment
 that they do not deserve. And weak
punishment
 means that criminals will have less time staying in jail, which means that really dangerous criminals to society become free in a short time. To sum up, I actually think that
motivation
 should be checked always because in most cases
motivation
 opens the situation in
more
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 justice view. So considering all the arguments that were presented above, means that
second
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a second
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 opinion is more
trustful
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trustworthy
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.
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