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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#space #exploration #money
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There is a controversial statement heating a debate over the fact that the
discovery
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 of the universe is too costly and the
governments
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 should fund for other significant aspects. I consider myself a proponent of
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 argument. In terms of
space
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exploration
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, there are several reasons why
this
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 is not really unnecessary. Every
discoveray
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discovery
 have its own meaning for society, and
space
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discovery
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 is not an exception since it provides us with a considerable amount of knowledge that play an important role for
the
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human being.
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, ancient scientists found that the Earth went around the Sun, and people based on that study to calculate days, months and years.
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, the world is facing overpopulation so we will soon need to seek other planets to reside in. For those specific reasons,
space
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exploration
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 still needs decent funding from authorities.
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, there are still many urgent problems that
governments
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 should prior and spend
money
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 on. To be specific, medical health and education need to be specialized in
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 of
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exploration
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 or any other elements due to the fact that they are the backbone industry. It is undoubted that no economy can survive without the labour workforce, which requires medical service and knowledge to maintain productivity, yet many countries still suffer from the lack of health care.
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, Brazil's authority has spent
money
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 on erecting a stadium for World Cup 2014,
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 have to face the pandemic without the funding for the vaccine.
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,the
discovery
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 of
space
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 can be postponed for a bit if the
governments
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 use the
money
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 to solve the problem of residents since
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 is a lot more affordable compared to the funding for
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exploration
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. In conclusion, I believed that
governments
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 can still spend
money
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 on the
discovery
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 of the universe, yet they should focus on other important aspects of life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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