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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations
It is argued that most
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the
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people
believes
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 that it is beneficial to accept
negative
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a negative
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situation
 like unsatisfied in
workplace
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the workplace
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 as well as
shortage
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a shortage
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 of money and said that better adapt the
situation
 and learn to improve it. In the world we live today, struggles to survive is part of our day to day
life
,
however
, there are times that negative
situation
 must turn into
positive
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.
This
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agree
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 that improvement in
such
 a bad
situation
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positive because the person needed enjoyment in
life
 and the feeling of not
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left-out
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. Having
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a feeling
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feeling
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 of emptiness should be eliminated in
workplace
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 which
it
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may affect the work. There
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maybe
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 bad days, but in
those unhealthy
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that unhealthy environment
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environment
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 there will be
a
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one thing that will uplift the spirit
specially
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 in
workplace
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the workplace
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. Exhaustion
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maybe
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 felt during work but should be translated into good vibes. For
instances
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, in my current job, all the unsatisfactory environment is already present
however
 we must love the job and it will
kept
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on going
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.
On the other hand
,
on
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 of the reason that
life
 keeps moving is
positive
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a positive
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 outlook.
Furthermore
,
healthy
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 spirit has no
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chance
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change
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 of entering unhealthy
thought
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 and
mind
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. Keep focusing and believing that in every negative
situation
 there
has
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 the adverse circumstances.
For example
, every that a person wake-up it is already a positive
situation
 meaning that individual has still a mission in
life
. In conclusion, acceptance in a bad
situation
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 a good and achievable outlook because it may affect the work and social feeling and there is always a mission in every wake-up call.
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