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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything they try hard enough what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

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It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that telling
children
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 everything when they effort as much as they can. Regarding
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, there are pros and cons
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this
 trend. On the one hand, comforting
children
 that they can do anything is unrealistic. Not only can
children
 fail to prepare various qualifications, but they may
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financial difficulties. In
this
 competitive society, if
children
 do not learn academic subjects rather than what they want to learn, it is hard to get a
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 paid job to be survived. What is more,
although
 they have an enthusiasm to try very hard, they do not know how it is hard to achieve everything.
For example
, a significant number of students believe that they can be artists, but they have no idea how it is hard to become
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underpaid. As
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cheering to kids that they can achieve a goal when they try sincerely is not realistic.
On the other hand
, telling a possibility plays a key factor
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 stress, thereby leading to maintaining their mental health. Since In
this
 day and age, the majority of kids suffer from an excessive burden of studying, they need motivation that supports them to release stress which causes mental issues
such
 as depression and antisocial
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. What is more, giving advice that
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children
 can do anything with efforts brings about a
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positive
 result.
for instance
, a survey conducted by the Korea Mental Health Foundation has revealed that
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many scientists
 have found a notable result. The proportion that
children
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childhood achieve their goal is 20% higher than those who have not been told hope.
Therefore
, it is clear that positive cheering causes positive outcomes. In conclusion, while I accept that giving
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support to
children
 that they can
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unrealistic
, it is reasonable to point out that it contributes to positive consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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