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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role of education of children Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is a heated debate that has been sparked all over the world. It is argued that teachers should change the habit of giving
homework
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 to young
students
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 while others suggest that assignment takes part in a significant role
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education. Both discussion and perspective will be mentioned followed by a conclusion. On the one hand, children are more likely to remember their lessons by doing
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everyday
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. Since doing assignments is
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 practising
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, it can make the student perfect and expert in their lessons. What is more, if the teacher is not giving
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, the majority of
students
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 will not study the lesson that they have learned at school.
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, while
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 are doing their assignments, they could get more ideas about the course.
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, mathematics need a lot of
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 so that
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 are more able to understand.
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, it is claimed that giving a lot of
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 make the lack of free time for children. The
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 are at the age of fresh, active and happy. Even they have to attend school five days per week, they
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 have to do a lot of assignments at weekends too. They do not have enough time to do their hobbies or physical activities leading to unhealthy lifestyles.
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, the kids will lose their concentration on education since they have to do these lessons all the time. They will probably feel boring or sick of school work. To sum up, I believe that everything is comfortable with limitations.
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 is necessary for education, teachers must take care of
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' health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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