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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling if for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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It is true that a sufficient amount of household garbage has not been recycled. Many
people
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 believe that the best approach to increase recycling rates is for the government to pass legislation requiring governmental servants to sort
waste
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 more responsibly.
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, in my opinion, is a realistic method,
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 there are other options for dealing with
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 issue. On the one hand, requiring citizens to recycle rubbish could be a speedy solution to the
waste
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 problem. If
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 do not follow the guidelines, they may face penalties ranging from fines to prison sentences if they re-offend on a regular basis.
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 of
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 stringent rule,
people
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 will be more conscious of their obligations when it comes to disposing of household
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.
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, a problem cannot be solved through punishment alone; education is required. To be more particular, educating children and homeowners about the need
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 environmental protection through modest
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 sorting chores in their daily lives could help them comprehend how vital it is to safeguard the environment.
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, children will become more responsible for their future lives and will help to make them greener by correctly sorting rubbish.
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, it is thought that making recycling a legal mandate would be an effective method to address
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 issue.
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, I emphasized that,
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 to regulation, we should focus on the impact of education on
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's recycling
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 awareness.
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