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Nowadays technology is influencing modern art in areas such as design, painting and film. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#technology #art #areas #design #film #development
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The advances in
technology
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 are being keenly felt in modern art in fields like
design
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, painting and film.
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 a trend I think is beneficial for those studying and working in these
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, as well as the public. The main criticism levelled at the use of
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 in the
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 above is that it is de-skilling workers. With computer painting and
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, including on tablets, students in the above
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 are losing basics skills in producing objects by hand.
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, children are losing the ability even to hold implements like pens and brushes, to coordinate their actions, to plan and to think through the basic processes for producing something. The same applies to workers in these
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.
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 is a valid criticism, but the benefits derived from the increasing use of
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 in the
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 above are huge. Computer software,
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 as 3D printing, supplements the skills of the students and workers in
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, paint and films.
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 does not replace people but is an additional tool like any other. Another reason why the effect
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 is having on the fields above should be seen in a positive light is that these
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 have through the ages adapted to the available
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 to improve their work for the benefit of society. The latest
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 now allows efficient car
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 and mechanics, as in hybrid cars. Artists and filmmakers can use computers to create more entertaining interactive artworks and films with computer-generated imagery for the public benefit. As we have seen, while there may be some downsides to the increasing role of
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 in modern art
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 as
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, painting and film, its increasing influence is a positive development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratized
  • integration
  • virtual reality
  • interactive installations
  • intricate
  • craftsmanship
  • fusion
  • novelty
  • immersive
  • engagement
  • personalized experiences
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