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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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It is becoming more common among young graduates to postpone their
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 to broaden their world views.
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 there are controversial opinions about
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, I believe
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 can be beneficial for
students
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 for several reasons that are mentioned below.
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, people are realizing the importance of selecting a profession based on one’s internal preferences. By travelling to new places,
students
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 find time to explore their interests and find out what career path they want to choose.
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 often happens when young people start to do various activities, like volunteer work, while they are travelling.
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, when they finish their
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year
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, they will have a sense of what they are going to do with their lives
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 since they have a better understanding of themselves and the world.
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 some people might argue that taking a
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year
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 will cause
students
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 to lose academic momentum, not experiencing other activities will result in academic burnout.
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, in today's job market employers are looking for multiskilled employees. By taking a
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year
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,
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 get the chance to learn new skills,
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 as a new language, that can boost their
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 prospects in the future.
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, by working alongside local residents, not only
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students
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 participate in improving local communities, but
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 acquire soft skills, namely communication and teamwork. For
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 reason, eminent institutions like Harvard University and Stanford University have begun to incorporate programs for their
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 to work abroad voluntarily, to gain new abilities other than academic expertise. in conclusion, there are numerous benefits to taking a
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year
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 before applying for a job or university as soon as they graduate. Not only do they become more competent in their future jobs, knowing that they attained the necessary skills, but
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, they get to find their true passion in life.
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