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Some people say that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops, and public transport. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that cell
phones
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 should be prohibited in public
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 namely libraries, shops, and public vehicles. I completely agree with
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 view because it is quite irritating for everyone. There are various reasons why
people
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 need to restrict using
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 in public
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, using mobile
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 can distract other
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 and divert their attention.
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, libraries or study
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 where
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 need a silent atmosphere to focus on their work if your phone ringtones or incoming calls. It could make someone feel ignored.
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, you are impolite to others.
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, another dangerous situation for
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 statement is that it is easy for criminals to get away with it.
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 is because young
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 these days almost hold their
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, never get out of their eyes in modern technologies all the time to chat and play toxic games that easily slip from their hands.
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, markets, bus stations, and hanging out on the street… where there are crowded
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. It will be dangerous for those who go alone and keep
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 in their body. To sum up, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I maintain that it should be completely illegal in public
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. It is advisable that you will be ignored and
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 insecure. Let’s make a sense of comfort and a harmonious environment for all to have a private place.
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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Etiquette
  • Tranquility
  • Prohibit
  • Intrusive
  • Courtesy
  • Essential communication
  • Public decorum
  • Designated areas
  • Safety concerns
  • Noise pollution
  • Digital etiquette
  • Enforcement measures
  • Civic responsibility
  • Silent mode
  • Connectivity
  • Invasiveness
  • Social norms
  • Policy implementation
  • Moderation
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