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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing solutions?

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In more and more developed countries, there are an increasing number of
people
 with high life expectancy.
This
 essay will look at some challenges that society has to face and approaches several possible solutions to mitigate the consequences of an ageing population. One of the major challenges of the rising of elderly
people
 is that puts a heavy burden on the healthcare systems. The old seems to be more vulnerable to chronic diseases,
such
 as cancer, diabetes, stroke, and so on,
that is
 why they are requiring special medical treatments to be effectively treated.
Also
, the more climbing ageing problems, the more
people
 of retirement
age
demanding
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 to receive a pension.
Furthermore
, reducing the number of employees
in
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of
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working
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age
 put the nation’s economies under the pressure because of hitting the limits of diminishing taxes.
On the other hand
, there are several actions that could be taken to reduce the problems mentioned above.
Firstly
,
to increase
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 the retirement
age
 could be a solution for
this
 issue, perhaps roughly 65 to 70, because
in
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the
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apply
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recent days,
people
 in
this
age
 are likely to be healthy enough to continue a productive working life.
Secondly
, the government could take measures to encourage immigrants to work and study
on
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by creating more
favorable
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 opportunities.
In addition
, to make it easy for the private sector in providing healthcare and social insurance to lighten the government’s difficulties. To conclude,
although
 there is a variety of factors leading
being
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 older in population in many developed countries, the government can be implemented some measures to tackle
this
 issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • developed world
  • problems
  • individuals
  • society
  • healthcare burden
  • financial strain
  • elderly care services
  • availability of resources
  • younger generations
  • workforce management
  • promoting
  • healthy lifestyle choices
  • investing
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • adjusting
  • retirement age
  • pension plans
  • social support systems
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