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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, it can be seen that many universities around the world provide many lessons on the internet.
Therefore
, people can study online. In my opinion, it gives more positive development on people's life. The explanation will be explained before the conclusion is reached.
First
 of all, online courses increase
students
' opportunities to find their passions before applying for a university and finding a job. According to research conducted by CNN, " More than 80
percent
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 of university
students
 and new graduates are not happy with their faculty and new jobs, even though some of their income is higher than those who are." Learning online will be able to fix
this
 problem because the course is short, which makes them change their alternatives faster if it does not suit them.
Moreover
, online learning can help people able to become global citizens. When you join an online course, there are not only domestic
students
 joining the class, but
also
students
 from other countries around the world, which will make you practice how to work with others from other nations.
This
 will make younger generations, high school
students
 and university
students
, get more working experiences resulting in the development of their own business in the future. In conclusion, Internet courses provide more benefits to an individual's development. It enables teens and young adults to find their own path, and it makes everyone become a global citizen.
Therefore
, we hope that the world will get better if the universities continue to do
this
 project.
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