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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

#development #communication #people #friends
Recently,
technology
 is beneficial for humankind in order to establish an appropriate society around the world. Online communication will assist a large number of individuals to stay connected with each other without any difficulties. I strongly agree
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this
 phenomenon will establish
better
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 society as well
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networking among communities worldwide.
First
 and foremost, nowadays, social media
such
 as YouTube, Instagram, and Telegram assist many individuals to reduce their loneliness.
For example
, a male can send a message to his parents from different
continent
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 instantly.
Hence
, through those apps, a large number of
people
 might receive
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 of information about recent issues
such
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 and social
issue
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 directly.
As a result
,
people
 around the world will gain immense knowledge without any obstacles.
In addition
, with
technology
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 a large number of
people
 might develop a virtual community through social media.
For Instance
, a person who
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 an enormous interest in
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 game could develop an online community to share their hobby
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others member
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 and play together as well.
Hence
, whenever they have
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particular assistance about the game, they can ask
other member
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 to help and give a suggestion and
recommendation
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.
Therefore
, many
people
 could create their own communities based on their personal preferences. In conclusion,
technology
 has huge benefits for humanity. It can assist
people
 to develop their personal knowledge or even establish a suitable connection with other
people
 around the world. I believe
this
 online communication will lead to a better society in the future, as long as
people
 could reduce and mitigate the undesirable
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technology
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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