With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

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is beneficial for humankind in order to establish an appropriate society around the world. Online communication will assist a large number of individuals to stay connected with each other without any difficulties. I strongly agree

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networking among communities worldwide.

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and foremost, nowadays, social media

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as YouTube, Instagram, and Telegram assist many individuals to reduce their loneliness.

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, a male can send a message to his parents from different

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instantly.

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, through those apps, a large number of

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might receive

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of information about recent issues

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and social

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directly.

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people

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around the world will gain immense knowledge without any obstacles.

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a large number of

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might develop a virtual community through social media.

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an enormous interest in

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game could develop an online community to share their hobby

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and play together as well.

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, whenever they have

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particular assistance about the game, they can ask

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to help and give a suggestion and

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, many

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could create their own communities based on their personal preferences. In conclusion,

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has huge benefits for humanity. It can assist

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to develop their personal knowledge or even establish a suitable connection with other

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around the world. I believe

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online communication will lead to a better society in the future, as long as

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physical distance
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