Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinions in this?

It can not be denied that over
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recent years the popularity of fast
food
had increased rapidly. Some
people
say that the
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of fast
food
trend
seems to be
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good
trend
.
However
, in my opinion, I believe that it seems to be a negative
trend
more than a positive
trend
. In the following paragraph, my opinions will be discussed more in detail before the conclusion is reached.
Firstly
, when we
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to fast
food
, the
first
type of
food
that
usually
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be remind
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of is
the
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junk
food
. As we all know, junk
food
is
a processed
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processed food
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food
. It includes additive, preservative and
also
msg which might result to
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bad health in our long term life.
For instance
,
people
taking junk
food
usually had a higher chance to have a result
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high blood pressure,
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cholesterol
or even cancer
comparing
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to
people
eating
a clean
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clean food
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food
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, fast
food
usually
cause
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people
to gain weight as it is salty and is full of unhealthy fats.
Secondly
, the cleanliness and quality of fast
food
. When we are able to cook
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our own, we will keep our
food
clean and fresh as much as possible.
However
fast
food
restuarant
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restaurant
restaurants
do not usually control
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cleanliness and quality of their
food
.
For instance
,
Thailand
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, fresh
food
are
under
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hot weather without ice to keep it chill. Many
people
got
diarrea
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diarrhoea
from taking
these rotten
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food
.
Moreover
, there might be mice or
cockroah
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cockroach
cockroaches
in these fast
food
restuarant
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restaurant
which is really unhealthy for a person to eat as it might cause
food
poisoning to the consumer. In conclusion,
although
fast
food
is fast, delicious and cheap,
but
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when we compare
to
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it to
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our health in both
short
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the short
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term and long term, taking clean
food
that might take a longer time on your break or cost a little more would
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a better life in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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