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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Other, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #parents #children #members #society #school #place
Whether a
society
 is good or bad is reflected by the collective nature of its members.
Children
, being the youngest, have to be taught how to become a better
member
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society
. The responsibility of the same lies with
parents
 as well as with the
school
 they attend. Let us understand the role of
parents
 and schools in the following paragraphs before forming an opinion. It is often said that 'Home is the
first
school
 for a
child
' and I believe it to be absolutely true. Before
children
 start going to
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school
, they learn many things at home and try to emulate the behaviour of their
parents
.
For example
,
a
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home where respecting the elderly is a norm,
then
 there is a very high chance that the
children
 will learn
this
 and behave the same in
a
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society
.
Children
 raised in
the
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 environment where social values like trust, honesty are visibly
practiced
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 tend to inculcate those values in their lives.
Therefore
, it is imperative for
parents
 to provide proper guidance to
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young minds.
On the other hand
, a
child
's
first
 interaction with
the
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society
 starts when he/she starts attending
school
. The
school
 has means like Sports, Drama using which they can foster an
envirnment
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environment
 of co-operation.
Also
, by having structured and formal courses in their curriculum, schools can play a major role in turning
children
 into good
samartians
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samaritans
 of
society
.
However
, it is
observeed
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observed
 that the focus
tend
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 to shift to a
child
's academic achievements and it becomes the dominating part of a student's life. In my opinion,
parents
 have a major responsibility in shaping the
impresssionable
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impressionable
 minds of their
children
 and teaching them to become good members of
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society
. No one blames the
school
 in case a
child
turn
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 out to be a bad member of
the
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society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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