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Nowadays most green energy is becoming evermore prevalent in both developed and developing countries. Some argue they greatly reduce costs and are better for the environment, others believe they are a serious threat to energy security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The internal armed conflict in Colombia, which has lasted for more than 60 years, has caused the restorative justice related to the enforced disappearance to become one of the most difficult processes owing to its
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 nature of concealment and cruelty. Nowadays, the real number of the
victims
 is unknown, estimating that there are approximately 178.000 kidnapped people,
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an underestimated record
according to
 the National Center for Historical Memory. Based on the aforementioned, the intricate process of data identification and search techniques of the
victims
 requires a deep analysis of anthropological, genetic, topographic and molecular data.
Besides
, it requires the compilation of the stories from their families and survivors, leading problems to
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 management of the information, collecting the data, comparison, and identification. Currently, in Colombia,
this
 task is being carried out by the Missing Persons Search Unit which was created after signing the ceasefire agreement in 2016 and had its own National Search Plan.
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, there are
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 well-structured laws or rules to perform these complex processes.
Due to
 the existence of multiple transversal challenges, from identifying the number of
victims
 and
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 they were to
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 their belongings and bodies,
this
 study is being performed with the aim of analyzing from an ethical perspective the processes which are done in Colombia in order to face the enforced disappearance and identify
as well as
 repair their
victims
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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