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The internal armed conflict in Colombia, which has lasted for more than 60 years, has caused the restorative justice related to the enforced disappearance to become one of the most difficult processes owing to its
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nature of concealment and cruelty. Nowadays, the real number of the
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is unknown, estimating that there are approximately 178.000 kidnapped people,
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an underestimated record
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the National Center for Historical Memory. Based on the aforementioned, the intricate process of data identification and search techniques of the
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requires a deep analysis of anthropological, genetic, topographic and molecular data.
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management of the information, collecting the data, comparison, and identification. Currently, in Colombia,
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task is being carried out by the Missing Persons Search Unit which was created after signing the ceasefire agreement in 2016 and had its own National Search Plan.
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their belongings and bodies,
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study is being performed with the aim of analyzing from an ethical perspective the processes which are done in Colombia in order to face the enforced disappearance and identify
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Hydro energy
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Climate change
  • Technology advancements
  • Economies of scale
  • Intermittent
  • Variable
  • Capital investment
  • Energy infrastructure
  • Energy storage technology
  • Energy supply
  • Energy security
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