SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THEY SHOULD KEEP SAVING ALL THE MONEY THEY HAVE EARNED AND SHOULD NOT PAY TAX TO THE STATE. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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proportion of
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's income is being given to the government yearly as a tax based on the country. Nowadays, there is much controversy over
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obligation. Some
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argued that
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should own all of their
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and
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rule should change. It is noteworthy to bear in mind that
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are trying even harder compared to the past for a living and giving
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is not pleasant for them;
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, I believe that
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have been resulting in a lot of benefits for humans for years. The following essay will overlook two of these advantages.
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, the twentieth-century humans are used to having
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immediate access to the social services that
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require
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budgeting.
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, the
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facilitated
ground plays which are located in different
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districts
of a city is one of those services which are still being built increasingly due to the dramatic expansion of urban areas.
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, for the government to afford to respond
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growing demands of its citizens, it needs
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money that will not be provided unless by residents'
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.
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, not only do the construction of these facilities need money but
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their maintenance requires enough budget.
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, another positive effect of
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that should be into account is for the citizen's incomes to be balanced.
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, earning
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unlimited
money might be preferable to the constrained salaries, but it suffers from the disadvantages that
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the community into two groups of affluent who are consistently earning more and poor
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whoes
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whose
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conditions are getting continuously worse.
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, tax can be viewed as a brake for the latter group to keep the integrity of the society. To sum up,
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paying a proportion of salaries as
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to the government is not desirable for anyone, it should be continued since it has brought us advantages. I believe by paying
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the continuity of the social services will be kept and it will decrease the chance of
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division.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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