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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many governments have a belief that economic progress is their priority.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that other types of progress are as important as economic
growth
. I personally stand in the argument that developing in other things
such
 as strengthening the military reinforcement should be treated equally important with the
growth
 in the economy.
Firstly
,
growth
 in the economy does not mean that the
people
 are happy. South Korea use to be a developing
country
 after the Korean
war
 it use to be one of the poorest countries in the world, but now became a developed
country
 and some
people
 believe that as the economy got stable it became more competitive to go to a good university and getting a job. As
people
's standard of living increases parents start to use a lot of money for their children's education and it became more competitive and brought side effects
such
 as an increase in suicide from stressful school work.
Secondly
,
war
 can happen to every
country
. If a
country
 loses a
war
, economic
growth
 will be useless. The
war
 between Ukraine and Russia has raised awareness. It shows why the
country
 should be strong to protect the
people
. In conclusion, I grew up in a
country
that is
 still at
war
 with North Korea. I believe that developing in the military should be an equal priority with economic
growth
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