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Some people think that teachers should be responsiblefor teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A well-known adage from India says " ACHARYADEVOBHAVA", which means
teachers
 are
next
 to God.It is a highly debatable topic whether
teachers
 should be concerned with only academics or
also
 teach manners and etiquette to children. in
this
 essay I intend to discuss both perspectives.I, personally side with the former view. Those who say that
teachers
 should only concentrate on teaching course material argue that competition is stiff and if children lag behind in curriculum, they will never be able to catch up with their counterparts in other parts of today's global village.As it is
teachers
 find it difficult to complete the syllabus in the given school hours. If they have to impart moral education
also
,it would be an added burden on them.
On the other hand
, the main reason why some people think that
teachers
 should impart moral values
also
, isis that a teacher is like a potter,Who can mould the children in the shape it is guided to.A good teacher has the potential to become a friend,philosopher and guide for his
students
.
students
 always try to imitate his actions or implement his teaching, so he can impart moral education without taking out special time for that, by just having good behaviours.
therefore
, in that ,respect a teacher has a much more role than just reaching academic subjects.
furthermore
,
teachers
 convey many good things to parents and society through
students
 in many parts of the world.
For example
,in Nepal,where the illiteracy rate is very high,
teachers
 convey many valuable messages
such
 as personal hygiene through
students
.when
students
 go home and tell their parents that their
teachers
 say everyone should wash hands before meals,
then
 parents listen, in
such
 areas,
teachers
 are playing a much greater role than just being academicians. In the finale, I believe that
teachers
 have a much bigger role than just covering the syllabus.
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