Social Media has helped us increase our virtual networks. This has isolated us physically, making us socially awkward in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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advancements in technology, social
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has become a core part
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our mundane. A normal teenager
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around 6-8 hours a day on social
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affects us all in different ways as we lose
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with our humanity and forget social norms,
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making us less amicable than ever. Kids these days tend to act awkward among social
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as they have lost touch
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how to interact. I agree
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the above statement as expounded below. To commence with, we, as humans, are social animals. Without interaction or communication or social
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, we can not exist.
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of social
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got us closer to
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sitting miles away but
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took us
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from friends and family who live in the vicinity.
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, Kids these days rather stay in than go out. On a latent note,
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agoraphobia
might be emerging among these children or
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which is a state of a person actually fearing going out and
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other
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, What we need to understand is social
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has been designed to be addictive and
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we should set some boundaries for ourselves to
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some time for ourselves and our loved ones, just so we would not lose touch with who we are. To recapitulate what has been iterated above,
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and children are driven by social
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which made them restricted to more congenial life experiences and do something enthralling.
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may allow them to explore life and live exhilarating moments as they are intended to.
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