some people believe that zoos have no useful purposes. do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Keeping wild
animals
in cages for public exhibitions is a tradition that people have been performing for a long time and for the majority of people
this
is an amusement and educational purpose for kids while others think it to be a very inhuman act.
This
is a much-debated issue and I personally find no usefulness of a zoological garden where these
animals
and birds of different kinds are kept for public entertainment.
First
of all, the idea of keeping wild
animals
in cages is really a brutal one and humans should not be proud of acting like
this
. Who has given us the power and authority to forcefully bring
animals
to zoos and
then
be hilarious watching their activities? Do our weapons and brains make us superior and powerful enough to decide the lives of other species? No, if we are superior to those wild
animals
, it is our humanity and superiority of thinking power and where would that humanity be when we engage other species? There are thousands of amusement parks and children's parks and we should not make a
zoo
that would only represent our brutality and the outcry of the
animals
. Have we ever thought if a more intelligent species arrives in our territory and encases us as we do to other
animals
, how pathetic that would be for us? Many people would say that those are educational purposes and to let the kids know about those
animals
. But in a
zoo
what we see are encaged
animals
with their dismay and helplessness. Children would never learn the true nature of those
animals
when they would learn it from a
zoo
. Programs
such
as Animal Planet and Discovery channels are two better alternatives for children to learn about those wild
animals
than the
zoo
. Zoos in many countries are used for commercial purposes and no matter what the authorities do; they can’t ensure a free life for a bird that should be flying in the sky rather than trying to escape from the cage. In conclusion, the
zoo
serves no useful purpose and there are no good reasons to put the
animals
and birds in cages.
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