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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #sites #impact #individuals #society
Today, we are living in a world that has
unlimited
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resource
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 for all kinds of subjects.
In
particular
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 using a social networking
site
 is one of the
way
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 to access many pieces of information and interact with others,
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter, etc.
However
 few
people
 are considering a huge negative impact on individuals and
society
. In
this
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, I am going
explain
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 why a social networking
site
 became a bad influence on today's
society
.
Firstly
, a social networking
site
 can easily spread false information.
For example
, There was
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 incident on Facebook years ago. It was about a speech from the president of the USA, it was an urgent announcement about a nuclear bomb. After that announcement, it's become a popular topic on all social media. later that day, the official US
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 announced that it was fake
nws
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news
 from some infamous hackers. Referring to
this
 incident, social
medial
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 is too easy to access to fool
people
's minds.
Secondly
, a social networking
site
 could build escapism from reality. Most
people
 in social networking sites interact with others through a text or direct message system. It is so well designed to meet new someone, which is leading
people
 to refuse to meet
people
 in real-life. In conclusion,
Although
 a social networking
site
 is one of the convenient tools to access information and meet others, it's too risky for individuals and
society
 without control. So I surely agree with the idea that a social networking
site
 can be a bad influence on today's
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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