In some countries, the number of shootings increase becausee many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, cases of gun shootings have increased because
people
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can legally buy
guns
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. Some public argues that gun is for protecting ourselves and they need them to do so,
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I stand in the argument that if
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were illegal the number of these crimes will definitely decrease. There is one main argument that
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should be legal and it brings advantage to society. It is that
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are to protect themselves from
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, in a small corner shop in America where
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are legal, owners of shops use
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to protect themselves from robbers,
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it can protect
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from wild animals
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as bears and wolves or more.
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, there is a couple of reasons for
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should be illegal. The one that attracts the most
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is that, if
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were illegal there will be no shooting in the
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place. In United Kindom where
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are ,illegal there are no criminal cases related to
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to the United States where there is a lot of cases.
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,
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can bring more
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than not having them. It is true that
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can be more dangerous than knives or any other type of deadly weapon, and it will bring more threat. to some ,up it is true that
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can protect
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from other
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it will bring more
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with
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supplied to every household
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shootings
  • guns
  • increase
  • home
  • accidental
  • domestic violence
  • easy access
  • impulsive
  • violence
  • gun control laws
  • gun violence
  • ownership
  • regulated
  • misuse
  • public safety
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