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In some countries, the number of shootings increase becausee many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, cases of gun shootings have increased because
people
 can legally buy
guns
. Some public argues that gun is for protecting ourselves and they need them to do so,
,
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 I stand in the argument that if
guns
 were illegal the number of these crimes will definitely decrease. There is one main argument that
guns
 should be legal and it brings advantage to society. It is that
guns
 are to protect themselves from
threats
.
For example
, in a small corner shop in America where
guns
 are legal, owners of shops use
guns
 to protect themselves from robbers,
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 it can protect
people
 from wild animals
such
 as bears and wolves or more.
On the other hand
, there is a couple of reasons for
guns
 should be illegal. The one that attracts the most
people
 is that, if
guns
 were illegal there will be no shooting in the
first
 place. In United Kindom where
guns
 are ,illegal there are no criminal cases related to
guns
.
In contrast
 to the United States where there is a lot of cases.
Secondly
,
guns
 can bring more
threats
 than not having them. It is true that
guns
 can be more dangerous than knives or any other type of deadly weapon, and it will bring more threat. to some ,up it is true that
guns
 can protect
people
 from other
threats
,
however
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 it will bring more
threats
 with
guns
 supplied to every household
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shootings
  • guns
  • increase
  • home
  • accidental
  • domestic violence
  • easy access
  • impulsive
  • violence
  • gun control laws
  • gun violence
  • ownership
  • regulated
  • misuse
  • public safety
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