According to a recent study, the more time people use the Internet, the less time they spend with real human beings. Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world- wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. How far do you agree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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internet
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life.
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internet
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others
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reasons
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why
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useful
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internet
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online. Not only thy can buy products but
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people
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daily basis.
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all time
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.While masses fixed to hangout their
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a
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their communication skill it
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their confidence level. To my mind
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effect
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everyday life. If
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great distance world wide. .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital era
  • Social isolation
  • Cyberspace
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Global village
  • Virtual reality
  • Remote connections
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Digital divide
  • Cyber-socialization
  • Screen time
  • Online networking
  • Physical disconnection
  • Social dynamics
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