You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – describe the equipment – explain how it might be useful at your workplace – offer help in purchasing it

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Dear Sir , Kindly let me introduce myself.

This

is Mee Mee, a Human Resource assistant from

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department . Please be informed that I come up with the idea of purchasing a Paper Shredder for our office. Before sharing its usefulness , let me explain

about

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its physical features .

This

shredder is neither too big nor too small with 2 feet

height

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. And , the width and breadth

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3 feet respectively. On top of that , it can shred 50 papers spontaneously. I am very sure that it is going to be potentially fruitful in our workplace. I have seen that all employees have torn papers and

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them away recklessly. I think it is not totally appropriate for company confidential concerns.

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, it does not consume too much voltage and even if the power is

outage

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, it could work well with its own battery. Having its usefulness considered , I am planning to get quotations from three vendors. If you are interested in it , please let me take you to shops for more information. Looking forward to getting your confirmed decision. Yours faithfully, Mee Mee

Submitted by winter.thiri on Mon Mar 21 2022

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