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Nowadays the day many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the type of rela

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Since the beginning of humanity, people communicate and interact through many ways and methods.
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 two decades
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 the shape of interaction changed and went through other dimensions. It's rightly said that
technology
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 several ways. On the one hand, our lives
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 been obviously related to
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 and its own frames of getting interaction. Nowadays if one wants to make some social talks the easiest way is to go through the social media community and
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 to interact with either family members, colleagues or friends. Actually, one of
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 communication ways is going on now with video games into
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 world or what has been called recently Metaverse. Strangely,
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 meeting from their own houses while they are lying on their own beds.
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, the area of business has become wider
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 and has new own rules according to what
this
 new
technology
 is bringing newly. Most of the companies has become on the internet by running their businesses on virtual meeting platform or managing connections by phones and computers. To conclude, our world has really changed, and as it's said that we are in the speed age, where everything is going fast. We can
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