Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

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Dear Komal, I'm writing

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what place

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be the best for you to reside as you mentioned the same university where I used to study a few months back.

Firstly

, I would like to

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about my accommodation, I used to reside on Nelson

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street which is a street across

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University, it was a detached house where all the faculties were included but my landlord would never let

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use the kitchen though it was included within the rent. I was very disappointed as it was not

a the

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quiet atmosphere for a student. In the end, I would suggest you do not make the

the

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same mistake which I committed, for a

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student the best accommodation is a university hostel which is full of other students and you could

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actually get help for your assignments from the other students studying the same course. I hope everyone is doing well in your family. Yours sincerely, Karina.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

163 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Compared to past, more people are now trying to learn a foreign language to increase their chances of landing a better job in their native country or to have better opportunities to work abroad. To what extent do you agree with this point of view?

‘The best way to educate children is by using the Internet in every lesson.’ To what extent do you share this opinion? What other ways are there of making lessons effective for children?

Some parents prefer to stay in care homes after their retirement instead of staying with their children. Why is this happening? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

some people say that music can bring people of different cultures and ages together. to what extend do you agree or disagree?