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Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

#friend #palce #course #university #advice #place
Dear Komal, I'm writing
this
 email to you,
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 what place
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 be the best for you to reside as you mentioned the same university where I used to study a few months back.
Firstly
, I would like to
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 about my accommodation, I used to reside on Nelson
the
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street which is a street across
the
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 University, it was a detached house where all the faculties were included but my landlord would never let
I
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 use the kitchen though it was included within the rent. I was very disappointed as it was not
a the
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 quiet atmosphere for a student. In the end, I would suggest you do not make the
the
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same mistake which I committed, for a
,
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student the best accommodation is a university hostel which is full of other students and you could
,
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actually get help for your assignments from the other students studying the same course. I hope everyone is doing well in your family. Yours sincerely, Karina.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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