Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

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Dear Komal, I'm writing

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email to you,

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what place

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be the best for you to reside as you mentioned the same university where I used to study a few months back.

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about my accommodation, I used to reside on Nelson

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street which is a street across

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University, it was a detached house where all the faculties were included but my landlord would never let

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use the kitchen though it was included within the rent. I was very disappointed as it was not

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quiet atmosphere for a student. In the end, I would suggest you do not make the

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same mistake which I committed, for a

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student the best accommodation is a university hostel which is full of other students and you could

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actually get help for your assignments from the other students studying the same course. I hope everyone is doing well in your family. Yours sincerely, Karina.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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163 words

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Your friend has been offered a palce on course at the university where you studied. She would like your advice about finding a place to live.

Include an introduction and conclusion

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

All the people in a company should be treated equally and provide with the same number of holidays in a year or people doing different jobs enjoy different amounts of holiday time. To what extent do you agree or disagree.