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Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For centuries,human is solely responsible for deteriorating ecosystems.Each person should know how to contribute their help for nature, it will be helpful to the society in all the ways.Some people claim that high
school
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 schedules should contain community
services
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 as working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching
sports
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 to young
children
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.I completely agree with
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 statement by these adolescents will benefit society as well as the environment.
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 academics always play a vital role in the student's carrier as they learn difficult topics in the subjects.Working for unpaid community
services
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 will have a negative impact on the
students
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 as they will not get much time for concentrating on academics.
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,If a high
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 kid is teaching
sports
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 to the younger
children
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 needs a lot of patience and there will be more physical activities due to
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 he may face both physical and mental pressures.
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, for charity,
students
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 may travel to other places because of
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 lot of time will be reduced for studying.
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, knowing responsibilities at a younger age will have more benefits.If a student is working for unpaid communities
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 he will know his responsibility to take care of his surroundings and mother earth. Participating in public
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 will help
children
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 to get motivated and socialize with people.
Students
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 will get to know the importance of a hygienic and clean environment.
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, during my high
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 days, I have volunteered in a cleaning service association where we clean our surroundings,
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 helped me in preventing diseases
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 as dengue, malaria etc.
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, playing
sports
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 is the best exercise for health, so teaching
sports
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 to the other kids will help
students
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 in leadership qualities and they will learn to control their anger. To conclude,
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 working for unpaid communities will be having more benefits than drawbacks.
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 kind of activity will help
children
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 to be more active and motivated as well as it will
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 help our environment.So, I advise schools to schedule some time once a month for community
services
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 by
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 student's studies will have less impact.
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