In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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world, most of the
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parents
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are giving more
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to their children
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to
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the past
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. In one way it is having
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a positive
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impact on younger
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.
Eventhough
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plays a key role in the present society.
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both sides and argue in
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of later.
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offspring
having
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more
freedom
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to previous
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. It is really
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good advantage for the children who are in
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generation. They can lavishly enjoy their childhood without
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. For
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parent's
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also
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supporting them.
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, in our day to day
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life
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we are seeing so many
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are spoiling their health due to lack of
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.
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it leads to
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a child's
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mental
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. I obey that, responsibility should
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to all younger individual's and make them strong in every aspect of
life
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. So that, they can lead their
life
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without
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with out
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without
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any family support.
on the other hand
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, there are some negative aspects, which
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plays
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a vital role in the
kids
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development.
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freedom
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should be limited and
parent's
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parents
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have to create boundaries for them.
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Otherwise
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the
freedom
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will be misused.
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, the more
linence
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licence
given youngster's are misusing, and they are habitual to alcohol, drugs and many more. Currently, many
youth
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are getting attracted to the worst habits and spoiling their
life
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. Not only spoiling their
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, but
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they are making their families
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hurt. Though the pros, there should be cons too. In conclusion, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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that
the
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freedom
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should be given more to the younger people. So that, they can come to know the shoulder of responsibility , whilst they are leading their personal
life
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.
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