In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#years #children #freedom #development

tody's

Correct your spelling

today's

show examples

world, most of the

parent's

Change noun form

parents

show examples

are giving more

freedom

to their children

compare

Wrong verb form

compared

show examples

past

Correct article usage

the past

show examples

. In one way it is having

positive

Add an article

a positive

show examples

impact on younger

one's

Change noun form

ones

show examples

Eventhough

Correct your spelling

Even though

there is a positive effect, the negative development

also

plays a key role in the present society.

This

essay will discuss

the

Remove the article

apply

show examples

both sides and argue in

favor

Change the spelling

favour

show examples

of later.

Now a days

Correct the word

Nowadays

show examples

offspring

having

Wrong verb form

have

show examples

freedom

compare

Wrong verb form

compared

show examples

to previous

day's

Change noun form

days

show examples

. It is really

Remove the article

apply

show examples

good advantage for the children who are in

present

Add an article

the present

show examples

generation. They can lavishly enjoy their childhood without

missing

Correct pronoun usage

itmissing

show examples

. For

this

parent's

Fix the agreement mistake

parents's

show examples

also

supporting them.

For instance

, in our day to day

life

Add a comma

,life

show examples

we are seeing so many

youngster's

Change the noun form

youngsters

youngster

show examples

are spoiling their health due to lack of

freedom

Hence

it leads to

child's

Correct article usage

a child's

show examples

mental

disorder's

Change noun form

disorders

show examples

. I obey that, responsibility should

given

Change the verb form

be given

show examples

to all younger individual's and make them strong in every aspect of

life

. So that, they can lead their

life

Correct your spelling

without

show examples

with out

Correct your spelling

without

show examples

any family support.

on the other hand

, there are some negative aspects, which

play's

Correct your spelling

plays

show examples

a vital role in the

kids

Change to a genitive case

kid's

kids'

show examples

development.

The

Correct article usage

Freedom

show examples

freedom

should be limited and

parent's

Change the noun form

parents

parent

show examples

have to create boundaries for them.

Otherwise

Add a comma

,Otherwise

show examples

the

freedom

will be misused.

For example

, the more

linence

Correct your spelling

licence

given youngster's are misusing, and they are habitual to alcohol, drugs and many more. Currently, many

youth

Change to a plural noun

youths

show examples

are getting attracted to the worst habits and spoiling their

life

. Not only spoiling their

life

, but

also

they are making their families

getting

Wrong verb form

get

show examples

hurt. Though the pros, there should be cons too. In conclusion, I

Correct your spelling

believe

show examples

belive

Correct your spelling

believe

show examples

that

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

freedom

should be given more to the younger people. So that, they can come to know the shoulder of responsibility , whilst they are leading their personal

life

Submitted by tejaswi.chinthapalli on Tue Mar 22 2022

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
35Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

285 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 checks
Get all the feedback you need to keep improving your charts and letters.
Unlimited Task 2 checks
Practice and perfect your skills with essays.
Personalized suggestions
Know how to boost your score.
Detailed mistakes analysis
Get instant feedback. Spot every mistake.
Topic ideas generator
Get topic-specific ideas to enhance your writing.
Vocabulary helper
Get the right words for any topic.
Progress tracking
Track your writing improvements.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
Nowadays many students live with their familes while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios. Include relevant examples in your answer.
In contemporary society, the choice of whether to live with one's family or relocate to another city for university studies has become a significant decision for many students. This essay will explore the advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios, providing relevant examples to illustrate each point.
4.5
band
In today's world many people own a smartphone. DO you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweight the disadvantages?
In high-tech society, human is becoming more and more tech-savvy.Meanwhile, a number of cutting-edge gadgets increase sharply with smartphone explosionin all over the world.Besides,bringing different andvantages, smartphone also has many drawbacks which is less than the benefits in my view.
5.5
band
Some people believe that the government should spend more money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Nowadays, some people support the idea that the government should invest a higher amount of money in the form of arts such as painting and statues. This, in order to make places more liveable. I agree with this view because investing in art is a good way to promote economic growth in the cities.
5.5
band
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The free availability of knowledge including scientific investigations, business details and academic outcomes is a controversial topic. Although some people suppose that sharing this information freely leads to devaluation of them, others advocate that publishing information without any cost requirement influences societies to support future projects. I strongly agree with the latter because of the reasons explained in the upcoming paragraphs.
6
band
Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is argued that the amount of packaging should be made to be a responsibility of the manufacturers and shops. However, some people contend that individuals should be the ones avoiding purchasing items with plenty of packaging, In this essay, we will discuss both sides of the coin and will give a logical conclusion after careful consideration of both sides of the argument.

In recent years children have been given more freedom than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays many students live with their familes while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios. Include relevant examples in your answer.

In today's world many people own a smartphone. DO you think the advantages of owning a smartphone outweight the disadvantages?

Some people believe that the government should spend more money putting in more works of art like paintings and statues in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.