In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

#future #people #holiday #country #travel

Holidays are the best way a person can get out

from

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stress and spend time with a loved one, but often the question

where

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to go on holiday. I

completly

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completely

agree

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that many

people

will choose to take

vacation

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within their country rather

then

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going

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overseas.

This

is due to several reasons which I will be discussing in the following section of the essay. The

first

reason is cost, in recent times, travel expenses are getting expensive due to

pandemic

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. Many

people

are unable to travel

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overseas due to expensive

air

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airfare

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fare

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and

accomodation

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accommodation

accommodating

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, prior to covid travelling to south

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countries are

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cheaper for

indians

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however

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after

covid

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we have seen

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surge in the

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flight

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tickets and hotel price. So, considering the financial crisis and a

persons

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household expenses, many

peoples

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obvious option is to choose their holiday in

home

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country.

Secondly

People

are always

facinated

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fascinated

by expensive foreign travel and mesmerising locations around the world, but the fact is in many instances

people

are not aware of beautiful places in their homeland.

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, I was always fond of travelling to

Alps

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, but recently my friend took me to

place

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called Ooty in

southern

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the southern

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part of India. I was

completly

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completely

blown away by the stunning

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natural

nature

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

213 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

domestic tourism
international travel
cultural exchange
national pride
affordability
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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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