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One of the consequence of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to better medical facilities,
longevity
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the longevity
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 of
people
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 has increased.
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 vast experiences of old
people
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 can be utilized for the
progess
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progress
process
 of a nation,
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, on the downside, it might lead to
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development
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 in developing nations. In my opinion, the positive aspects
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the
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precedence over the drawbacks. The greatest benefit of increased
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 expectancy can be availed by utilizing the experience of aged
people
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, which plays a pivotal role in the
development
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 of a
country
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. Old
people
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has
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 worked throughout their
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,
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result
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 they have vast knowledge
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 the young generation which lacks
life
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 experiences.
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, these experiences
helps
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 in strengthening of
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the political
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 system in a
country
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. Taking Japan as an example, most of the political
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 in their government
are
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 of sixty years.
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 makes their
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best
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 in governance throughout the world.
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, making use of
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 of experienced old
people
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 makes
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country
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a country
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 great.
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, there are some challenges associated with the increased living capacity
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development
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 in
underpriviliged
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underprivileged
 nations. Due to the decline in the mortality rate, the population of countries are on a surge.
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, it leads to
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 of natural resources which cause
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 increase in
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inflation.
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, In Africa, poverty is linked to
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increase
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 in the
life
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 expectancy of the
people
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.
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, it leads to
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 drop in the pace of
development
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. In conclusion, despite there are few disadvantages regarding fall in the
progess
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process
progress
 of developing nation, there are a plethora of advantages which outweighs the negative aspects. In my opinion, I believe that
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 experience of
aged
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the aged
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 population plays a vital role in the
progess
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process
progress
 of a
country
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • medical care
  • quality of life
  • manageable
  • curable
  • economic strain
  • aging population
  • social security
  • workforce challenges
  • sustainability
  • overpopulation
  • environmental issues
  • standards of living
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