Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that volunteering for
community
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services
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without being paid should be involved in secondary schools'
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.
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, I strongly disagree with
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assertion as it is not feasible.
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competitive society, academic perforation plays
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factor in getting a better job in the future.
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, not only
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parents push their kids to study academic subjects, but
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may
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study them
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of spending their time
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involving
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services
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.
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, a survey conducted by the Korean Education Foundation has revealed that almost 30% of parents are against their kids working for communities since they believe
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should use their time on studying rather than volunteering. As the example clearly illustrates, as people do not want their
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to volunteer for
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services
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, mandatory volunteering will be rejected.
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although
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schools suggest volunteering
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,
students
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will not do them sincerely as they cannot get a visible outcome since
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tend not to do their best without proper rewards.
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, recent media in Korea reports that about half of
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haven't done volunteering.
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, they just have gotten signs on reports from
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relatives
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without working.
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, it is reasonable to point out that unpaid work for communities among
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is not realistic. In conclusion, there is no doubt to point out that unpaid-mandatory
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service at schools cannot be operated since parents prefer their kids to study academic subjects, and
children
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will not willing to work it.
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