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Band 5.5

summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs illustrate the proportion of changes in electronic appliances of households, while the
second
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 graph shows the number of
time
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 spend doing
housework
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 in one country from 1920 to 2019. Overall, it is clear that washing machines and refrigerators had a significant rise throughout the period. While a number of
time
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 spend doing
housework
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 acquired a downward trend. As we have seen, percentages of households in washing machine and refrigerator were increased significantly. The refrigerator started at 0% in 1920 and
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 there had a dramatic increase to 90% in 1960. After that period of
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, they were slightly increased to 100% in 1980 and remained stable until 2019. While the percentage of vacuum cleaners began at 30% in 1920. There increased dramatically between 1920 and 1980 (30% to 90%).
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, the proportion was continuous to rise until 100% in 2000 and at the end of the
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 they had no change.
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, the washing machine was rise gradually between 1920 and 1960 (40% to 70%) and there had some fluctuation from1960 to 2019. In the
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 line graph, There was experienced as a downward trend of
time
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 spent doing
housework
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. In the beginning, There started at 50 hours/week for doing
housework
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 in 1920 and
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 there were declined significantly to 20 hours/week in 1960. After that, the graph was a slight fall to 10 hours/week in 2019.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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