Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

It is undeniable that art gives meaning to our lives and helps us to understand our world.

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, It is believed by a few

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that the

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budget should not be wasted on

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rather than allocating it for the betterment of the

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. In my opinion, I completely agree with

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opinion and believe

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should

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the

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until basic human needs are not ensured thoroughly.

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, there are several strong points to support the idea of allocating more funds in sectors like

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, health and employment.

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,

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is the backbone of a country. If any

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failed to ensure

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for all of its

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, essentially, it will be a massive barrier

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the

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growth.

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, in developing countries,

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schools are the primary sources for locals to get to see the light of

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those

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who live in remote areas.

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, not

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in a country

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the privilege to get proper treatment when it needs. To ensure

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basis

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need for all,

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government

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must need to allocate more budgets in

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sector

compare

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to others.

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, lots of

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in Bangladesh rely on

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hospitals due to

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cost effectiveness

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compare

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to private hospitals.

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, A higher unemployment rate is considered as a curse to its economic growth. Needless to say, to improve the lifestyle of a nation,

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government

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need to make it certain that everyone has the opportunity to get a job. Failing to do so, cause a huge risk for brain drain and

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in crime rates.

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ultimately

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the country

more

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weaker.

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as

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every

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lots of

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migrated from developing countries to developed countries due to better job opportunities and better

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lifestyles

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life styles

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. To conclude, while basic needs are still in demand, developing in

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will not be beneficial for a

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share of its

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.

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need to make sure that the basic needs are properly ensured prior to thinking about funding

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.