Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transportation system such as railway and trains. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

There is no denying the importance of
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While
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it is a commonly held belief among
people
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that they prefer spending
money
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on highways rather than buses and trains, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I disagree with the statement, because
transportation
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systems contribute to reducing traffic and the environment.
To begin
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with, the government plays a crucial role in the city
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I think they have to invest more
money
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in the
transportation
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system.
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, if the government do that, it will help to reduce traffic and it can move many
people
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at once, which leads to saving time and
money
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.
In addition
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,
this
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will assist
people
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in reaching their destination quickly.
For example
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, in Japan in 2008, they invested in
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more than anything else, and the results are that the majority are saving time to reach their jobs. Another point to consider, funding for public
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reduces pollution in the city. It is
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possible to help the environment , which means that good for the plants and animals and produces no more carbon dioxide.
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, investing in public
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helps the city’ infrastructure. In conclusion, despite
people
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having different views, I believe that I disagree with the government funding
money
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in roads and highways more than public
transportation
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. Investing in trains and buses is more beneficial than building roads and bridges, which will reflect on
people
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's productivity in their jobs and lives, because that will help them save time and
money
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.

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task-response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and stay on it. Add one or two clear reasons.
coherence
Your essay has some good moves. Use simple links to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'so'.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph. Start with your point, then add an example and a short reason.
grammar
Check small grammar slips and punctuation to make the text clean.
task-response
You show a clear view that you disagree with the claim.
structure
The essay has a simple form and a clear ending.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • money
  • spend
  • roads
  • motorways
  • public transport
  • railway
  • train
  • bus
  • city
  • traffic
  • time
  • cost
  • plan
  • government
  • job
  • growth
  • safety
  • access
  • future
  • balance
  • invest
  • fund
  • long-term
  • short-term
  • move
  • connect
  • improve
  • budget
  • route
  • network
  • fare
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