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After
this
program runs smoothly in one area, I will expand and support the same programs to be implemented in the other seven branches of Sahabat Anak (NGO where I volunteered) to continuously increase the numbers of school participation through identity
fulfillment
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. For the long-term planning, I will observe the possibility to adapt or integrate
this
program with
NGO
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the NGO
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/organization where I work to reach the larger numbers of families supported. Alternate planning is to expand the collaboration with
NGO’s
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or Government to expedite the process and wider the target region.
Moreover
, the purpose of
this
project is not only to support identity
fulfillment
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but
also
to facilitate the children to
enroll
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in formal school and get opportunities to develop their talent through a variety of training and mentoring. The ambitious goal is to keep monitoring our assisted children until they are graduated from at least high school and trained with fundamental skills.
This
will be my vision to contribute to Indonesia. I believe inclusion is the dream that will transform into reality with continuous work and commitment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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