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Some people think itis better for children to begin to learn to a foreign language at primary school then at a secondary school

#people #itis #children #language #school
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 are only
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, minor reasons that
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 the statement, not to learn
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language
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 at the primary level.
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children have a fickle mind. They all are busy in their daily studies,
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 of one more
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 can increase their stress level.
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nowdays
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, the weight of school bags are heavier
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then
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kid's
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 weight. It is difficult for the child to carry so many books at a time and
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 can affect their health too. But the pros of the idea outweigh
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 cons. According to the child psychologist,
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ninety
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brain
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 development is done by the age of seven years.
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 when we can easily teach new things to the children,that they can remember for a long period. Adding additional
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 or
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language
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 in their syllabus
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 can expand their learning power.
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, they
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motivate
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 to do hard work, which
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 their mental personality. To sum up, it is very essential for children
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 learning
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language
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 at primary schools. It has a number of benefits for a child , which will be useful for him in future.
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 there are some drawbacks of it, but these are minor and can be removed by
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