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Some teachers think that international student exchange programs would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweight the disvantages?

Nowadays, many teachers think that it is advisable for teenagers to join international exchange
programs
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. In my opinion, not all exchange
programs
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 are suitable but I believe that the advantages are still more significant. The
first
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 obvious advantage is the opportunity to gain new knowledge. When
students
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 go to
study
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 abroad, they have a chance to speak the native language.
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, Thai
students
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 who apply for international
programs
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 in the US must be forced to speak English on a daily basis, which means that they can greatly improve their language
skill
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.
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, some countries there are have
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special or well know subjects that if they
graduates
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 from these schools or universities, they will get advance opportunity more than other
people
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.
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 as, in
France
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 there are have fashion schools top ranks in the world,
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, there are
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 full of equipment and professionals who have a lot of experience.
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,
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Study
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studying
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 in international
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be
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 able to take
they
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them
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 to
learning
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learn
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 new cultures.
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, Chinese
students
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 who
are
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are studying
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study
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 in
India
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 schools, they are might shock when they see Indian
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are eat
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 by using
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their hand
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hand
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.
On
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the
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other word, when Indian
people
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 see
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 use
chopstick
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 to eat food, they will wonder how Chinese
people
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 use
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 as well.
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, Some
people
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 argue that
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study
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studying
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 abroad is spending too much money.
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, some families
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do not have much income to afford their child to
apply
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 exchange
programs
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 because it
is not only pay
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is not only paid
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 for education, but they
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 have to pay for rent the apartment and food too. In conclusion, I think
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study
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studying
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 international
programs
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 are
advantages
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advantage
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. There are arguments on both sides of the issue, but ultimately new knowledge and cultures show that ensure
students
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 improve themselves several factors.

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