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Many Museums Charge For Admission While Others Are Free. Do The Advantages Of This Outweigh The Disadvantages?

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It is required to purchase a ticket to enter some museums, while others allow it without charging anything.
This
 essay will discuss how the advantages of charging a
fee
 outweigh the drawbacks. It will
first
 be demonstrated how keeping a
fee
 provides a constant stream of revenue and filtration of actually interested
people
,
then
 we will analyze how the primary disadvantage which is blocking the creation of public interest not valid. The
first
 advantage of charging for admission to a
museum
 is a source of revenue for the
gallery
 authority. Setting up and running a
gallery
 is quite expensive, requiring trained professionals and collecting precious artefacts. A portion of
this
 can be funded from ticket sales.
For example
, it is stated in a report that archaeologists are more interested in working for museums that are able to pay more handsomely.
In addition
 to that, when they are required to pay, only
people
 who are genuinely interested in the
museum
’s contents visit there.
People
 willing to do unwanted acts in a
museum
 are reluctant to pay the
fee
. In an interview, a veteran curator told that they faced many unpleasant situations when the
gallery
 he worked in provided free tickets. As soon as a small
fee
 was imposed, the number of
such
 instances dropped dramatically. In
this
 way, paying a small premium can benefit the
museum
 authority with both cash flow and security.
On the other hand
, the primary disadvantage of charging a
fee
 is
people
 becoming less interested in history. But it can be argued that
people
 who do not care much about what the
gallery
 contains are unlikely to visit anyway if the
fee
 is removed. In the town of Maynamati, only 20-30
people
 visited the local
museum
 to view the newly uncovered excavations when they had to pay a price of 30
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. When the price for entry was withdrawn, the number remain unchanged. It was observed that the
fee
 reduction had no effect. In conclusion, charging for admission does have advantages like providing financial support and weeding out the
people
 creating a nuisance. It
also
 outweighs the flawed argument that paying a premium would curb public interest.
This
 is why I endorse charging an entry
fee
 to visit a
museum
.
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