Some people think that only the government can make significant changes in society , while other think that individuals can have a lot of influence . What is your opinion

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It is a common belief that just the
government
can make
dramatically
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change in the
country
.
However
, I firmly
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belive
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that
people
can have a variety of
influence
in
society
because
people
is
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the
one
who
make
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makes
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up almost a
society
.
To begin
with,
government
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the government
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can make
significant
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a significant
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change because it has a lot of power that can
forces
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the
society
,
rules
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to rule
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the
country
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through
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though
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through
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laws. The
goverment
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government
has a big
influence
in all
field
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fields
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of a
country
,
military
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the military
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and
economy
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the economy
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are the big
one
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ones
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. A
government
can order to
invasion
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another
country
and it has a huge impact on the
relegion
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religion
region
or global community.
For instance
,
Russian
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the Russian
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government
has ordered to invasion
Ukraine
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of Ukraine
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in February 2022 and the
influence
of it is not minor, many Ukrainians die and the
the
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economy has
fell
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fallen
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imediately
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immediately
. A demonstration wave through all
people
around the world has
rising
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to stop that war,
this
prove
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that how important of a
government
impact on their citizens or even other
country
inhabitants. On top of that,
people
could have a lot of
influence
in the public because
individual
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the individual
an individual
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is the
one
who
make
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makes
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up almost the
society
.
Individual
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An individual
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has the right to vote the president who rules entire the
country
or even against the
government
if the ruler of a
country
is weak or
poor-spirit
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.
People
is a
center
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of
a
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society
, and the
government
has
responsibility
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the responsibility
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to ensure their benefits are satisfied.
For example
in Vietnam, fireworks are banned by the
government
.
Howervert
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However
,
people
are not follows
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that rule and almost family in Vietnam use fireworks to celebrate Lunar New Year's Eve. To sum up,
government
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can make a
dramatically
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change because it has a lot of power but the
people
is the
one
who
make
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makes
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up a
society
and really
lead
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it. For these reasons, it is clear that
people
have more
influence
than the
government
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • society
  • government
  • changes
  • influence
  • policies
  • laws
  • intervention
  • societal issues
  • collective action
  • progress
  • development
  • harmonious
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